Sunday, July 26, 2009

Coming home.....

Lying back
her skin alabaster

He drinks her in with
his greedy

He lingers on
the gentle curve
of her side

The space between
bottom rib and
rounded hip

He reaches

His skin blue back
nearly ebony

To touch to feel
to linger

Her gaze never
leaving his

A sigh
escapes him as

His hand fits
exactly into
her curve

As though it
was always there

Waiting ...
just for him

Many thanks to Annmarie Lockhart of voxpoetica for publishing this piece. You can find Coming home archived in the voxpoetica poem blog.


Karen from Mentor said...

The following comment on coming home was in my email inbox this morning. I've copied and pasted it here since I enjoyed it so much.


Dear Karen

I liked your poem. I tried to comment in the poetry blog but the comment box is quite demanding and after three attempts I gave up. At first I got a bit disoriented in the poem as well as in the comment box because I didn't understand who was lying back. Grammatically it is first her, then him. There is another possible shift in the point of view with the line "her gaze never leaving his face." On reading it again I found these shifts to be quite sensual, binding the two lovers together and encouraging you to explore the scene just as you might run your hand over the curves and through the holes of one of those recumbent figures by Henry Moore.

I tried to put this comment in your blog but I can't paste it in and since I can't be bothered to retype it I will send it your email address instead.

Your blog is very funny.


Karen from Mentor said...

Thank you for your lovely words.
Come back anytime.
Karen :0)

Annmarie said...

Glad to see Joseph was able to teleport his comment for the crux of it is dead on! Incidentally, comments can be complicated because spam proliferates. You would be amazed at how many "comments" that have been submitted to vox poetica were actually autogenerated spam! But seriously, it's not that cumbersome: name, e-mail, a few letters in a box, and that's pretty much it. Even a Dartmouth grad (or prof) should be able to do it!
Karen, your poem is great and your site is most definitely very funny!

Karen from Mentor said...

Thanks Annmarie. I still get a kick out of you calling coming home a "poem" I'm labeling it here as sensual sentences.

And I plan to post more sensual sentences in the future.

Thanks again for all of your enthusiastic support.

Karen :0)

lindacassidylewis said...

Karen, why do you not consider this a poem?

I think it's lovely. To me, that dip at the waist is a very sensual spot, just made for a lover's hand. I applaud your celebration of it.

Thank you for sharing it with us.

Karen from Mentor said...

Thanks Linda.
What I write when I'm in this mode just seem like little frozen snippets of sensual time.

I never thought about them being poems until Annmarie called coming home a poem.....feel free to call it anything you want, I'm yes the human form is certainly worth celebrating.

Thanks for your lovely words.
Karen :0)

Karen from Mentor said...

This is an excerpt from an email from Daniel Powell. Anybody who has been paying attention knows that I have a "thing" for teachers. :0)
Daniel teaches writing at a college in Florida where he lives with his wife and newborn daughter. Daniel was one of my first commentors when I started blogging two months ago. Having him comment on such a different style of my writing is very cool.

He gave me permission to post his comment and I'm very pleased to do so.

I thought the poem was strong--sensory laden and well balanced. You are carving out a nice place to talk writing at your blog, and the work you're putting out there only helps bolster that place as a destination for writers and artists.

judy said...

I think when you get published on a poetry site, it's a poem! And it's lovely. I've read it many times now and each time I do, I discover some new detail, some new little dance in the wording that delights me.

josephgrinton said...

I'm not sure what a Dartmouth grad is but just to show I'm almost as clever as one, here is a comment to prove that Karen didn't make up that email. It really was from me.

Karen from Mentor said...

Thanks Joseph.
Now we can come stalk I mean visit you at your site.
P.S. I think the Dartmouth got thrown into the mix because the sculpture link you inserted in your comment came from Dartmouthedu.

I do love that you linked my words with such a lovely sculpture.

Come see me anytime.
Karen :0)

Karen from Mentor said...

You say such wonderful things. [and I PAY you so little....]
Karen :0)

Country Girl said...

So so lovely. Truly. You are tres, tres talented. xoxo

Karen from Mentor said...

Awwwww... CG... now you've made me blush....


Milli Thornton said...

Beautiful. Your words flow with such sensuality.