Monday, April 5, 2010

A poem for you, yes, you

knocking...

naked
unafraid and open

needful
willing and waiting

for you to cast aside
the built up layers
and let me in

32 comments:

Laurita said...

Talk about built up layers. This poem has plenty. The possibilities are endless.

Marisa Birns said...

Yes, it only works if the second (or however many) is willing to be as naked, unafraid, open, willing, and accepting.

Heartfelt and lovely.

Laura Eno said...

Awesome! Yes, I can see how others could attest to the multiple layers in this...but call me one track minded. It's all about sex - really.

Karen from Mentor said...

I heard "one track mind...all about sex..." so all I can say Laura is your husband is a lucky man.

[grins at you]

Karen from Mentor said...

Thanks Marisa! I think everything should be heartfelt.

I often feel like a heat seeking missile searching out hearts that hit the same frequency as mine.

So cool when they show up in your life.

Karen from Mentor said...

Yay Laurita!
I love that you found the piece open to interpretation. I liked layering the text so that you actually get two poems in one.
fun!

I'm really excited that I actually got a poem to look the way I wanted it to in blogger...for the FIRST TIME EVER....

I'm going to go back later and fiddle with the spacing on the others.

Thanks for stopping in. I'm enjoying your poem a day extravaganza over at Brain Droppings.

:0)

Anne Tyler Lord said...

How lovely - yes,all I imagined was sex too, but now I can see the layers too, when I calm down.

I immediately noticed your magical ability to use different fonts, sizes and good spacing - I am envious, how did you do it? Did you make it into a graphic?

Karen from Mentor said...

"when I calm down" made me giggle Anne. I had a graphic to use with this, but I opted for just using the simplicity of the words.

I'm still waiting to hear back from Melissa about how she makes her beautiful vispos. I want to try my hand at that sometime this month.

I'll email you the technical aspects of how I got this text to look like this today.
[so excited!]

Thanks for stopping in!
Hugs!!
Karen :0)

estrella05azul said...

Absolutely love this Karen, both layers! And you say you don't necessarily consider yourself a poet ;)

PS: you can give Windows Live Writer a try for posting with different fonts, sizes of fonts, etc.

Karen from Mentor said...

I'm pretty pleased with it too Estrella.

*looks pleased...stands in front of mirror picturing self in fetching beret*

:0D <---big big grin

Alan W. Davidson said...

I think it's great that the imagination can run wild with this one, Karen. I like it...

Helen Ginger said...

I like that it starts with "knocking" and ends with "let me in". It says so much in so few words.

Helen
Straight From Hel

judy said...

You know I've been really thinking about the messiness of connection. Sex is part of it, but all real meaningful connection puts us at risk and can't be accomplished without a willingness to be naked, the judgment that connection is more important than our fear of being vulnerable.

Beautiful, Karen.

Bryan Borland said...

For me? I'm flattered!!

It *is* really all about connection, whether to our lovers, to ourselves, to our writing. Read this poem multiple times as if you are speaking to each of those - and see how it changes.

Karen from Mentor said...

*punches the air*
YES! That's what I was talking about yesterday Bryan, how fluid poetry is depending on the slant you're standing on when you read it.

[Hugs you]

Karen from Mentor said...

Judy,
I read what you said over and over. I LOVE that you got all that from my words. And I know that how you interpreted this piece was colored in part by actually knowing me, but I hope that even people who have never had a conversation with me will take the same sort of thing away from it.

Making yourself vulnerable, really allowing yourself to be naked when you're making a connection is so incredibly intense when you actually get the same sort of thing back.

love and hugs darlin,
:0)

Karen from Mentor said...

Thanks Alan. Tomorrow I'll think about writing a poem about a dog who drives a bus. What's that you say? You already saw one of those? Damn....where IS my drawing board?
Thank you for taking the time to read and comment. Oh and by the way? I liked your Easter Fez. [that's even fun to say]

Karen from Mentor said...

And Helen the interesting thing is if you jump around and read it out of order, or "in the round" it still works.

I think this is the leanest poem I've written, but somehow it's also the one with the with the most depth.

Thanks for stopping in. It's always great to see your smiling face.
:0)

Jessie Carty said...

love that you managed to get the poem to look so unique on the page! that can be so hard with blogging software :)

Karen from Mentor said...

I know Jessie! Having the visual element fall into place was so great for something this short. Just like having the right inflection when you read poetry aloud, for a lot of us the visual element is as much a part of the piece as the words.

Thanks for stopping in.
Karen :0)

Jesus Crisis said...

Love this poem!

Susan Helene Gottfried said...

This is the type of poem I'll be thinking of all day now. It really is a poem for me, yes me.

Karen from Mentor said...

Oh I'm so glad Susan. Thanks for stopping in.
:0)

Karen from Mentor said...

John!
Thanks so much for commenting on my piece. I've got some of the upcoming lix&kix events on my calendar. I'll see you soon.

:0)

Kris said...

I'm not normally a poetry person. Unless something is a slightly scandalous limirick, I don't usually enjoy it. But this was pretty cool!

Karen from Mentor said...

I rebel against structure Kris, so I don't know that I could write a limerick. Naughty free verse though, that I can do.

Tomorrow I'm posting a startling poem titled:

"Revealing my true nature".....

You might like that one too. Tickled that this one earned a "pretty cool" from you.

*big smile*

Amy J Taylor said...

I rebel against structure too...meter is all that matters, and even that ought to be unconventional. We have twin muses indeed, Karen...both leaning after the messed up 'chase' this week! :)

Karen from Mentor said...

I was so tickled when I got to your place today and saw that your poem was titled "knock twice" Amy!

As I said in my comment there, the last part of your piece floored me:

"and knock twice…my stolen sin,
for this time,
I will surely let you in."

Loved it.
Thanks for stopping in to see me.
Karen:0)

KjM said...

Twenty-two words
scattered across a page
tumbling -
to fall
some right here, yet some o'er there -
as though shy

…and then you see which ones are they -

oh my

----------------------
Delicious poem, Karen. Remarkable how re-reading reveals more and more. Most cool, indeed.

Karen from Mentor said...

"*Squee*"

She said when she gleefully read Kevin's comment.

And then murmured...."I think I like that one most of all...."

Cat Connor said...

Fab poem!!

Oh and I'm back!! :-)

Karen from Mentor said...

Yay!!! I missed you Cat. Thanks for the "Fab"

*runs off to check her email for pictures*