Monday, March 18, 2013

unhooked.....


a flame burned
out, not through
 
grooves of entrenchment
dug, then left behind 

like lines
etched onto glass 

cool to the touch
but still rough

25 comments:

Kevin Mackey said...

Such deft strokes detailing pain, regret.

Of particular fondness -

"a flame burned
out, not through

"cool...
but still rough..."

My Monday's started very well, Karen, because I encountered this artistry.

Karen from Mentor said...

ah....kevin, there's nothing like the words of an irishman to salve poetic wounds.

thank you for commenting my lovely friend

Becky Sain said...

Gorgeous, like you.

Karen from Mentor said...

awww, thanks becky.
*smooch*

Brian Miller said...

nice...i like how you go from the heat of the flame to the cool touch of glass...and the leaving of the etchings, and how that pairs with entrenchment....and that it is still a bit rough...some really cool contracts...interesting title as well...cool piece...smiles.

Karen from Mentor said...


gonna link this to dverse poets later today, brian. love the community of poets you've gathered under your banner.

thanks for taking the time to read and comment. MUCH appreciated.
:0)

Marisa Birns said...

Your word choices, the rhythm, and the imagery it evokes = wonderful, just wonderful.

Claudia said...

i like that you embed touch here...it's not necessarily seen but when you run your fingers over the glass, it's felt..like so many things in life..

Karen from Mentor said...

Thanks eversomuch Marisa.

Sometimes a square peg just doesn't fit a round hole. Doesn't mean it wasn't worth doing.

love to you!!
xo

Karen from Mentor said...

hey claudia,

smell and touch are the biggest parts of life for me. If I paint my fingernails I feel blind.

appreciate you taking time to stop in!

HisFireFly said...

rough around the edges
but the words are smooth indeed

Karen from Mentor said...

"smooth indeed" nice. thanks.
:0)

Grace said...

Flame is one of my fav words ~ Smiles ~ Like the heat & coolness to the touch ~

henryclemmons said...

Great contrasting lines, smooth, rough. Great line work, word choice. Excellente work.

Karen from Mentor said...

thanks henry. nice to have you stop in.
:0)

Karen from Mentor said...

love it when a word has flavor grace. trying to tie a bunch of them into an edible soup is the fun part.
nice job wrangling the poets today!

ayala said...

A lovely piece!

Gretchen Leary said...

An incredible sense of touch and texture in your words. I can feel the rough cool edges. Very nicely done.

rumoursofrhyme said...

I love the contrasts between the flame and the cool glass, and the roughness where smoothness is anticipated. These are wonderfully tactile images.

kkkkaty said...

ah...vulnerability comes to my mind here..yet a willingness to risk feeling again...am I way off? Nice.

Karen from Mentor said...

*smiling*
you're dead on kkkaty. what is love without vulnerability? being open... loving with all your heart ... that's all that can be done. when it works it works like crazy, when it doesn't ... well ... sometimes you're only left with crazy. :0)

thanks for stopping in.

Karen from Mentor said...

*waves at ayala, Gretchen and rumours *
thanks eversomuch for taking the time to read and comment.

Kevin Mackey said...

" well ... sometimes you're only left with crazy. :0) "

Ain't that the truth. But, without the risk you'll never know. And not knowing...ah, that's not living (to my somewhat-harshly-tutored-by-experience eye.)

Annnd...who's to say "crazy" can't be fun, sometimes!

Buddah Moskowitz said...

I really like the images here how they flow and still at times contradict each other. You say a lot with a little: 'tis artistry!

estrella05azul said...

I especially love the comparison to lines etched into glass. The imagery couldn't be more perfect, Karen.